to read the same book over and over
and expect a different ending
let me rewrite the story, my version
don’t worry, we still don’t end up together
but at least the season we pass through will be a little less winter
the silence not so static
and then maybe i can toast the memories
where the rain has funnelled to my cheeks
crying until the air is too bitter to breathe
to own the heart that will never stop trying
run hours to the beach just because
there is a higher chance of shooting stars here tonight
he sweeps me off my feet and i hate myself for having legs
fingers absentmindedly reaching and i am terrified of having hands
i tell my mother about the tall boy and she thinks of you
like your leaving was broken glass and i’m still swallowing
but some nights i fall asleep on the couch
dream of enough moonlight to wash me breathless
that’s how i know i made it out
that’s how i know there is still a chance to become
poetry
So passionately, excitingly written…
and that last line hits very deep.
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Utterly incredibly poetry.
I love this line in particular:
… but, honestly, there were a lot of other lines that I loved too!
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Thank you so much Ben 😍
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I loved the rhythm of this poem and the word images you created.
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Thank you! Really appreciate this x
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Wow! that is blooming brilliant. like your leaving was broken glass and I’ still swallowing… wow That line had me
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Ahh thanks! I’m really glad you liked that
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Oh my….what an intensity….the passion…deep & beautiful lines….amazingly written
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Thank you Navin! 💖
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You’re welcome ✨
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Agree with y’all! Moving, filled with images too many to presently consider! It needs more than one reading 🙏🐕♒️✅🎈💯🌞
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Awww thank you so much! This really means a lot 💖
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love your rewrite in your own words and well penned poetry Melody. ❤️ Cindy
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Thank you so much Cindy! xx
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You are most welcome! ❤️
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This is exceptional, Melody! From concept to closing, it is remarkably beautiful. Your imagery and metaphors twinkle in a smooth lyrical flow. I really love this! Well written!
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Thank you Brad! Really appreciate this 😍
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Very beautiful writing!
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Thank you so much! x
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just, wow
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Thank you Craig!
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‘Its over and done we move because you loose some to gain others’
Beautiful piece
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Thank you Cynthia! 💖
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heartfelt and direct, well written
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Thank you so much Lauren!
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this is amazing! I love it 👏❤️
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Ahh thank you so much! 💖
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This is beautiful in every sense
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Thank you so much! xx
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Going to follow you
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Well written
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Thank you Athira! x
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Always welcome..🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻
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Beautiful. Thank you 🙏
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Thank you so much!!
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Beautiful! Loved it!
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Ahh thank you ☺️
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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Thank you for the reblog!
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Happy to share!! 😊✨✨✨
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WOW!!! Here are my fave parts: “the season we pass through will be a little less winter
the silence not so static”; “dream of enough moonlight to wash me breathless”; “that’s how i know there is still a chance to become
poetry”. I’m beyond “wow’d”…I feel every word/phrase.
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Ahhh what a lovely comment! Thank you so much for this 💕
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You are so welcome, my dear ❤
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This is really beautiful. Thank You! 💖
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You’re welcome! 💕
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I love this poem! Beautiful choice of words. I especially loved the phrases, “toast the memories”,” the rain has funnelled to my cheeks”,
“he sweeps me off my feet and i hate myself for having legs”
” your leaving was broken glass and i’m still swallowing”.
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Thank you so much! This means a lot 💕
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Each line was amazing
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Ahh thank you so much for this!
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I love this ❤
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Thank you!! 💕
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